GWJ Writer's Throwdown: February 2013 - WTF?

brokenclavicle wrote:

Esprit de Corps: Nice! Very nice! Dug the whole feel of it. My one gripe is with Sgt. Wilkes and the situation with the bullet wound.

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One would think a Sargeant, or at least one of the soldiers, would be quick-witted enough so as to think of using a knife or another crude instrument to try and see if the bullet was still in there and, if so, push it out. Otherwise, perhaps trying to cut off the limb, though that might be too farfetched, I must admit. I would think these men would at the very least scramble to try and save their dying comrade. Just a thought. Or perhaps you meant it to demonstrate some degree of inherent ineptitude or disregard, neglect and/or apathy toward their fellow soldiers.

Regardless of that, I thought it was pretty great. Hell, it could make for a very interesting book in itself.

Thanks!

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I did consider having someone try to dig out the bullet, but I decided against it. The way I saw it, Edwards was panicking too much to think straight, and Wilkes had been told that the silver bullets were fatal so he didn't really believe there was anything they could do. Simmons was busy with his own little religious crisis so he was barely even paying attention. Everyone else was outside.

Mimble wrote:

Esprit de Corps - Great story! Particularly the opening dialogue, it really draws you in right away and keeps you reading. The idea of these guys

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being experimented on - immortal with detachable heads

- is pretty cool (though also kind of awful). I have one question though,

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were the bodies of these soldiers their own bodies? Were the bodies built from other soldier bits?

I was a little confused on that point.

They were supposed to be their own bodies.

Feedback time!
Mimble's story: Loved it! I've always loved Norse mythology so this was right up my alley. I really liked the relationship between lil' Thor and Huginn.

Afterthought: It was really interesting. It might benefit from being fleshed out a little more, but otherwise it had a nice creepy feel to it.

Two Birds, One Stone: Hilarious. I loved the dialogue, especially in the "bar" scenes. The title is great too

Pearls Before Swine: I like the setting, and the characters are delightful, especially Tut. I want to know what happens next!

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What does the sphere do?

muttonchop wrote:

Pearls Before Swine: I like the setting, and the characters are delightful, especially Tut. I want to know what happens next!

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What does the sphere do?

I'm not entirely set on what the mcguffin does... I've played around with the idea that it targets ascended species due to some key similarity shared by them by way of the ascension process itself, thus it would affect all ascended creatures (confirmed by Patty when asked about this by Tut). If I ever revisit the setting, I may define it a little better.

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Where's the March thread!? O.O I'm feeling lost without it, Ducki!

brokenclavicle wrote:

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Where's the March thread!? O.O I'm feeling lost without it, Ducki!

March thread! March thread! (no pressure, though, Ducki)

Shall I start one? Give Ducki some room? I have an "idea"...

Okay, here goes. Override me if you wish!

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I still have a few to read through from this month!

Gah, March Throwdown just completely slipped. I'm sorry gang. I'm working on a project that's due for a workshop, real life has been insane, and I started working on a new steampunk-erotica story that I think has a lot of potential...and I just completely forgot. If somebody else wants to propose one for the remainder of March, that would rock, else; I have some ideas for April, and I promise to get that one out before Fool's Day.

duckideva wrote:

Gah, March Throwdown just completely slipped. I'm sorry gang. I'm working on a project that's due for a workshop, real life has been insane, and I started working on a new steampunk-erotica story that I think has a lot of potential...and I just completely forgot. If somebody else wants to propose one for the remainder of March, that would rock, else; I have some ideas for April, and I promise to get that one out before Fool's Day.

Hope you don't mind but I already posted a March Throwdown. I figured you were busy, or kidnapped or on a trans-continental black ops mission to secure valuable resources for your... *SMACK* bad, Duoae, bad imagination!

The link is in the post above yours.